Last Train To The Chug

There are some nice ideas here but the piece lacks focus. As it stands now it seems like just a stream of consciousness with no particular direction. Try developing a few hooks that could tie these random ideas together.

Anyone who does a train is a friend of mine! Good stuff as you were sticking to the strenghts of the instrument. "G" was a good choice. I would like to encourage you to develop this into 2 different pieces. The "Train Imitation" and the "Chuggin' Train". As a general rule, you don't want to break the momentum of a train rhythm once you get it going. The rhythm is sacred in blues. You had a nice speed going on too. Keep that momentum! Once you get to your fastest speed you can vary things up with whistles, hand position changes, different mouth vowel shapes and dynamic changes. Always try and end off with a deceleration and a lonesome whistle sound. I think that I read that you were going for a "prewar" sound? If so, a good general rule is to stick largely to the major pentatonic scale adding blues notes as you are feeling it. Try and avoid the 4th degree of the scale (1 & 4 exhaling). JF

Nice strong tone in the opening. I like how you go to the 1+ and hang on it bit. You'll want to be cautious of how long you stay away from the main rhythmic element you present. This was a nice submission... with some extra focus on structure this can turn into a real nice song.

Cool start - train warming slowly pulling out and then you really drive it!! Nice techniques in there to effectively make it interesting. Good one!!

The trains are coming into the station thick and fast! Well done for showcasing the classic harp train sound!